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Hung-over, and can't see shit!

By RobanLtil | Posted: 01 December 2008

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12:15am:
The screaming as stopped, but I can still hear running. It was madness outside a few minutes ago. I could hear loads of people running while screaming and yelling in terror, and then these spine chilling cries; which I can only presume were some wild beasts in chase.
What the hell's going on?

1:33pm:
I've been stuck in this garage since I woke at twelve and ever since I drunkenly 
stumbled in here last night to grab another six pack and locked myself in. Frickin' Gumbar.

2:05pm:
I'm starving, hung-over, and the constant sound of footsteps is doin' my head in. Why can't anyone hear me shouting? Deaf bastards.

2:11pm:
That's it, no more waiting; I think I can finally open the garage door from inside. I've got to know what's going on out there. Will probably need more than one page for my next entry.
Here goes.
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Comments 
evakaye
12 December 2008
this is good. i think it would be better if you made it longer though... it leaves me thinking 'what IS going on?? whats going on with the spine chilling cries and the yells of terror?! and whats going to happen once he manages to open the garage door? what will he find outside?'

i'll be up all night, wondering what will happen! you HAVE to write more on this, ok?!! :D

i like the style you did it in.. journal entries by a drunken guy locked in his own garage. its good :) please write more on this one, please please please. i need to know what happens!

x
Murphy
15 December 2008
I like this style....it hooks the reader in and ask lots of questions....i think you should extend it but mantain the same atmosphere....but its awesome anyway  :)

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