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There are a few places you could improve this (I feel). A couple are probably just typos.
The task is done, no more longing to breath.
One child's future decided.
Alone in black solitude - or - Alone in the dark, solitary.
In the back with law (Don't get this part - The back of what?)
It wouldn't take much to tweek your poem to make it pretty good!
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I see what you mean Carl, thanks for pointing them out. I've always had a problem noticing spelling mistakes and typos on my own work.
As for 'In the back with law'. It means in the back of the court, with the lawyers and judge, where the decisions are made.
Thanks for the comments Carl, they are most welcome.
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