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I don't think the lives we live are full of hate. Indifference, yes, but not hate.
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I think this is a good starting point..the first 2 stanzas is quite cheerful... but following that the poem becomes dark and depressing....i think by creating this contrast with a less solid thought it would be better....e.g "The lives we live are full of hate" instead the lives we live are love and hate...i no thats not very good but you get the idea...keep writing...good potential :)
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