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When I get past your spelling etc. this is an excellent poem.
To be or not to be? What if that was the answer? Is it as
simple as yes or no? Are there more behind these words?
You either will or you won't. There are not two sides to the coin.
You can sit back and try to claim that it does not matter anyway.
If you had a choice would you stand alone against the world?
If you knew that you could fall would you put everything
aside and be willing to give up your life for what you believe is right?
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I like this poem, you have taken shakespears well loved quote and given it your own interpretation.
With spelling errors ignored it is very good.
Ruby
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you need to work on the spelling and punctuation.
To be or not to be... is this a question or the answer?
And is it a simple 'yes' or 'no', or is there something more?
No; you either will or you won't - no two sides to this coin.
Yet still we sit back and tell ourselves, 'It does not matter anyway...'
If you had the chance, would you stand alone
against the world, knowing you could fall?
Would you still stand, brushing your fears aside,
And be willing to give up your life for what is right?
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i like the idea behind this poem. although there are a couple of spelling mistakes and the punctuation could be worked on, i like what you are saying, and think that with a bit of tweaking here and there you could really make it great :)
my suggestion for improvements is above this message, i hope it helps, but i feel i maybe misunderstood a couple of parts so maybe i have got it a bit wrong. and i dont think my punctuation is perfect either LOL but anyway. x
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