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The only good thing about a bad day, I guess, is that the next day is usually better.
I like your poem! I would change the title to 'Prisoner of my Head'. It sounds, somehow, more to the point. I don't think the first line is right. I don't think you're confused at all (quite the opposite).
You could also make the poem a bit pithier. I don't use rhyme personally but as an idea (not saying this is any good :P)
Imprisoned, trapped inside my head,
living, thinking, seeming dead,
staying alive, I don't know why,
walking in crowds, as empty as sky.
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I agree totally with Carl. I've read your three poem's and you sound far from lost. In fact, it sounds like you've learnt well from the obstacles pushed in your way.
I myself had been through quite a bit when I was younger. But I truely believe, what doesn't destroy you, makes you stronger. And I read some of that strength in your poem's, keep it up.
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I love your work....It's depressing but theres an air of beauty about each piece....Love it :)
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I can actually relate to this poem, through some of the things that I am currently going through. I like it. I'm not that great in giving feedback about others works. All I can say is keep up the good work!
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I agree, you do not seem lost at all...but I can easily relate
and my nan always used to say that you cant be found until you know that your lost!!!!
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I agree, you do not seem lost at all...but I can easily relate
and my nan always used to say that you cant be found until you know that your lost!!!!
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P.S......This poem is fantastic
xxx
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