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Chris Hatter and the Magical Hat - Chapter1, Part1

By Lentonator2011 | Posted: 24 August 2011

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Chapter 1

For one street in Essex, night came and everybody were sleeping peacefully in their beds.

As darkness gave way to the moonlight, one ten-year-old boy was dreaming of action packed adventures and facing pure evil, until he was woken by a loud bang coming from the street he was living in. Obviously, he went to investigate. The young boy, called Chris went into the dark street, when he found a shortcut, that led him towards the town, or so he thought.

Chris followed the shortcut all the way until he came to a forest, in which a teenager a lot older than Chris was sitting on a blanket that was on the ground and had his face covered by a dark hood.

"Hi", Chris said.

"Hi, the teenager said.

"I'm..." replied Chris

"Yes, I know who you are", replied the teenager.

That sent shivers down Chris' spine.

"How do you know who I am", asked Chris.

"Everyone knows you, Chris. You're famous", said the teenager.

"I'm here to kill you, Chris", added the teenager, drawing a thin stick out from his back pocket.

At that point, Chris tried to run away, but got caught by the spell that the teenager casted from the thin stick.

Meanwhile, back at Chris' house, his parents were fast asleep, when a loud bang awoke Chris' father and almost immediately went to see what it was, he looked in Chris' bedroom first and discovered that his window was open, he went back to alert his wife who took the news very seriously. The couple then climbed though the window to see that Chris had left a trail of cake crumbs, because Chris was having a midnight feast on cakes.

The trail led them to a shortcut, in which they followed and found that their son was lying on the ground, concious but confused, Tom shouted, "Get away from him", and then Tom felt dizzy and went to sleep, His mother charged at the teenager with rage and was hit directly by a "Killero" spell that penetrated the mother's heart so severely therefore killing her. The father was looking to see any signs from his wife, but couldn't see any, so he then turned his anger into revenge and drew his wand out and shouted "Spectrify", in which a bright light of purple ejected from his wand and went straight for the teenager, but the teenager shouted "Allegro", a streak of lights ejected from his wand and met the purple light.

The two wizards fought immensely as they struggled to force a mistake from each other, then the father went for it forcing the purple light further, knocking the teenager to the ground. The father of Tom turned his back on the teenager, but then just as the teenager looked to have lost, he shouted "Killero" and the father quickly casted a spell on Tom, thus making him immortal and was then hit by a gold light which killed him.

The teenager the vanished into thin air as he turned around and spun his cloak around to teleport to safety.

*More details to Follow*

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brian dunn
24 August 2011

Much better than last time but your logic is a miss, you should have send that his bedroom was on the ground floor as most people go up stairs to bed and why would is mother and father climb out a bed room window when they have a perfectly good front door they could use. bread crumbs well not the best idea perhaps it has been snowing and they could see is foot prints going across the garden towards the alley? its good to see at least your not explaining every think that happen now  and have broken up your paragraphs more well done for trying that is what writing is about you write then you edit till it all makes sence keep trying and never give up thats my moto.

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