Damned Fool...xxx by blackrose

I don't think I like you anymore.
Respect?...
feels like it ran out the door,
while I watch my temple crash down to the floor,
I don't think I like you anymore.
Alright, I know how it was meant to be, 
but,
It seems like you made a Mockary of Me,
and that's not how it was supposed to be.
Giving to other's-so freely
directly,
dis-respectfully
in front of me.
Nah, It's not my business
(but it was...in my head),
spiritually you made me feel... dead,
drained.
So my crown, turned to a frown,
and what goes around 
will come straight back around
and you will feel what it is like,
to have no right to make a sound.
I was humble.
But you?
You?
Your emotional jumble was on sale.
Remember when you said that some paths will entwine?
Then tell me, why did I feel like your,
Concubine?
I, another victim of a Siren's Call,
the submission was a lesson
and you were the school, 
I passed with a degree in,
Damned Fool..x

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Comments

Carl

28 August 2008

I really like this poem. I can almost hear you speaking it!

blackrose

29 August 2008

thank you very much...thts exactly how i wrote this one....as if i was talking to the person directly, tryna express how i felt at the time!!!

Lupine Rob

20 October 2008

I'm no poetry expert, but I really enjoyed that. Could feel your passion coming off the page (or more precisely screen!), every line packed with emotion. Made me glad I wasn't the person your referring to in the poem!
(Just one pedantic point, mockery is spelt with an 'e' not an 'a' I think, forgive me if this was some deliberate, artisitic miss spelling.

blackrose

29 October 2008

ahhh, thank you!!!

I can't even remember writing this poem, it all came out in one go!, 
But I do remember how I felt at the time!!!

xxx

kneazle

02 January 2009

Wow..good poem. it flows like music, like someone speaking to you.

blackrose

07 January 2009

Ahh... thank you all so much for your comments i really do appreciate it.....

xxx

JD Higginson

23 April 2009

Hey blackrose,

Brilliant work once again. Love your work so much.

One minor correction: 'mockary' should be 'mockery' on line 8.

Very emotional poem though.

Well done.

JD

blackrose

03 May 2009

thank you so much JD your comments have really motivated me...so forgive if i 'keep' on thanking ya!.

whenever i recite this one i can always feel the emotion i felt at the time of writing!!! a very intense and personal moment that just had to share with the WORLD!.....lol

JD Higginson

03 May 2009

You're more than welcome. I'd never give people praise that they didn't deserve.

Keep it up.

JD

taylorswift97

08 January 2010

As I read this, I could feel your emotions and I could hear the expression in your voice. Wonderfully written piece.

Also see: From a Cat to a Bat (essexian) • VODKA, BEER, Or GOD (royalndnprincess) • GROW FINGERS. (Durlabh Singh) • The age of electricity (Carl) • Holding Hands (Zodiac) • Petal in flames (Carl) • All's asquish like tears on a wink's eyelash (Carl)

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