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(unfinished) - That God

By evakaye | Posted: 18 January 2012

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The God in the sky cast his eyes down

with no small difficulty; for it is hard to discern the world below

when it is both spherical and so far away,

not to mention that to see under such a frown

with mighty Stalinesque eyebrows hindering sight.

Yet from the cloud he had chosen to sit upon that day -

a strong one was required for the golden throne -

he managed to discern the poor little creations into whom he had blown

the  breath of life so long ago,

the poor little creatures from whom he had flown

but no, he was never with them.

Once, in the form of a man, he had descended from above

and spread a message of peace and love,

a fruitless mission, all in all,

for who of us can comprehend such a notion

when in old age we drown in depression

and have grasped only fragments of passing love,

and as for peace, not even a glimpse.

 

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Comments 
computer101
21 January 2012

Speaks of the truth, evakaye, well done. In the best of your poems, I always have a favourite line. This time, it's with mighty Stalinesque eyebrows hindering sight.

evakaye
21 January 2012

thanks again for commenting. this one is very much unfinished. it will be vastly changed by the end, i think. i was trying to convey irony and amazement regarding the concepts upheld in much of Christianity; the attempt was to create a critical, ironical, disillusioned, nihilistic/pessimistic voice. Atheist yet Theist. Believer, non-believer - human being. Depiction of a stern father-figure God whose orphaned children run around in confused and meaningless circles beneath him, as he watches, removed, distant, the majestic egoistic emperor whose gold seat upheld by smoky clouds is an epitome of his nature - i mean of the workings of his mind, his inner self - and also epitomizes the impossibility of such an existence. Therefore the impossibility of faith, and ensuing doubt, confusion, soul-cries, fear... In fact I like what i just said in this comment much better than the poem itself, haha. :)

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