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Hey!
I enjoyed reading this but I think you could have made it longer or expanded it out a bit more. It's a really good poem, a good idea too!
I'd love to hear more (if you continue with this particular poem).
Thanks,
Jessie122 :)
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I like this poem, to me it captures innocence like a painting full of colours.
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I liked it up until the last sentence because it was confusing to me. I didn't understand what was meant by "as he cuts the geometry off her face". Everything thing else was very descriptive.
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I meant to say everything else...not everything thing else.
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Great use of words in here to convey your meaning. Good job.
JD
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