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Apparitions

By Stephen | Posted: 15 April 2012

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Shadows gather around my bed

Shadows call me to the dead

White coats, cream surgery

White coats, save me please

 

Ether, too late to find a cure

Ether will null the pain I'm sure

Stretching, the faint heart beat

Stretching, they've cut so neat

 

Going back from whence I came

Going back to be born again

A better place waits for me

A better place to be free

 

Last feeling, please pull me back

Last feeling all gone black

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Comments 
kelly bella
21 August 2012

You handled this topic very well.  The repetions twice over to start the lines--excellent as well.  The last stanza being only 2 lines long gave visual emphasis that the end had come, as it often does, unexpectedly, cutting us off in mid-life, surprising us with its presemce even though we have been expecting it.

Stephen
22 August 2012

Thank you :)

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