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Life Games

By muppy7 | Posted: 18 February 2009

Views: 186
This one needs a bit of work, I'm not too sure if it works together all that well but have a read and see what you think. Any comments would be much appreciated!


Wake up,
Get up,
"School sucks!"
"Tough luck."
I learn, 
You learn, 
He, she, one learns,
I learn because I have to,
Not because I want to.
 "Want to sit with me at lunch-time?"
"Want to play with me at play-time?"
A simple answer for a simple question,
When nothing truly mattered; when life was fun.
Blink for a second and before you know,
It's a tedious 9-5 business show.
One desk, one chair, one company phone,
Cut-throat, dog-eat-dog, each for their own,
Difficult questions, impossible answers,
No one warned me about this.
No one to tell you who, what, where, why or how to,
Life's a game, didn't they tell you?
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Comments 
unbridledspirit
18 February 2009
It gets a point across.  I don't know how old you are but it appears to be written by someone looking back who has just gotten into the business world.  I think it takes a bit of a detour though from the point when you talk about "sit with me at lunch, play with me at play-time".  These seem like extra sentences that don't really pertain to one finding out that school wasn't really so bad as compared to the game of life (after school).  Good job all in all.

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