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Critiqued for an literacy agent

By TheDarkNarrator340 | Posted: 04 April 2009

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Okay, I understand that you'd look through "Chapter#1-4" and that's good. However, now I need a critique for the other story that I wrote called "Angel-Gaiden" in order to give it to my agent. 
If anybody got's the time and day to look through it (I'm sure ChrissieJo will), it would help as to land me into a contract with other publishers.
Right now, I'm sending "Chapter#2-6" out right now, so expect to see a lot. 
Thank you and don't forget to critiqued.
Meanwhile, I'm looking over my first book and editing "Chapter#3 and #4" and bringing out a couple more.
One more thing that I like to address. Those squares are actually the ["]; the parentheses. My bad for this mistake, Microsoft Word ruined it when I try to convert it into ".txt" file.
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Gary Jarvis
08 April 2009
I think it would be better to see chapter one and maybe two and that will tell you whether it has the so important hook that will not only grab a reader and force them to keep reading to find out what happens but also the publisher.

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