Isolation by TheDarkNarrator340

The quiet eerie ness that slices your ears
Juttering your heart and facing your fears

Reframing from crying and feeling the pain
From your own worthiness
Which seems pretty bliss

The illusion distorted from feeling neglect
From all of the words that hurt
And leave you in the dirt

Sometimes it bites and you feel the hurtful sting
From your own morality
In the story called reality

I'm pretty realistic 
Though it hurts me to know
That my own rhythms don't come with a flow

It really stands out and never means a thing
Cause now I'm lost 
 Came with a huge cost

So once again, I feel the errie feeling
From my own trust from is torn
Cause in the end, all I get is a scorn

Your use to success, but can't take a loss
Suprisingly enough, that's how you a big boss

It comes without saying, to lovers around
Your relationship will be slanted
If you ever take it for granted

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Comments

futuresmiles

07 April 2009

This is a good poem and brings that lonely feeling out when read. "Your use to success, but can't take a loss ..." seems confusing as if the words are being spoke to someone starring at themselves in a mirror. Of your many talents, are poems your strength? What would you write as a novel or short story? YOur off to a good start anyhow.

Antimatter

07 April 2009

Well done; I went and hugged my daughter twice.  

Your poem gave a person a better day; it changed a moment, for one life.  I get it and I get you, please keep bleeding it out and onto paper.  Your depth is shared, it's real and believable.  Let your emotions write for you, it seems to guide you well.

Gary Jarvis

08 April 2009

Hi TheDarkNarrator340,

Whilst this didn't invoke happy feelings with me this left me with an emotional glitch somewhere deep inside and that meant it touched me so well done. I just need to figure out what the glitch is and remove it with a piece of work of my own.

Thanks for inspiration and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Regards
Gary

Also see: And (gwdare) • Leona, My Dear Leona (gwdare) • Seeds of Language (DeUndrae) • Rise of the Angry Potato (Dr Steevens) • i have acted like a fool (jobejo) • Sweet Loneliness (Dr Steevens) • SPRING (mature gent) • My limit (Simone) • Listening (KittyNadem) • MUM A MOTHERS DAY THOUGHT (mature gent)

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Writer TheDarkNarrator340	Total posts: 91
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Council Bluffs, UNITED STATES

I'm an man who takes on many roles. None of which I knew exactly I wanted to do at first. I first started to write. Two years later, I started drawing well. Later I could sing and dance, and many more ... (Read more)

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