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Hi TheDarkNarrator340,
Another good flowing poem that paints an image for the reader and tells a story in only a few words. Just be careful with wording like the last sentence I think it should read 'Cause you're back in the saddle instead.
Good work keep it up,
Regards
Gary
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Hi Dark Narrator,
Brilliant wording in this piece.
Keep it up.
JD
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Hi Dark
Hope you don't mind if I say you come across better in Verse. I mean this is a positive way.
The message here is candid and strikes a cord with many. Like your other poems and your stories, they seem straight from the heart and follow the same theme. Keep getting the across 'cos it is good that you do and the more you write about this, the better you become.
Don't try too hard to get the words to rhyme; It took some of the flow.
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The brain is the outline and the heart is the story. That's my style of writing. Sometimes, I feel like I should change it from the original outline.
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Lord, I hope you don't Dark cos you have the voice in poems and this people struggle to find.
This is you Dark!; you must polish things and you'll do well, especially with your poems. You ought to put all of them together and really give it a good editing / review and who knows....... the right publisher might be round the corner!
Good luck.
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