To my Most Beloathed - a Sonnet by Iiocus

To my Most Beloathed

The mass, they say you're truly beautiful,
You're stunning, talented and marvelous,
Your matchless chasteness irrefutable.
Their praise is endless and calamitous.
Yet I protest, sweet dame of pulchritude,
For who could ever bear your vapid  brain,
Or stomach such bombastic attitude? 
Or not detest your temper so inane? 
You lack all wisdom and maturity,
You cannot take a step without support,
You teem with helpless insecurity,
And cannot breathe without a full rapport.
In short, my cute and droll insipid friend,
I'll look on you and loathe you till the end.

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Comments

Jennifer Munro

09 April 2009

I thought this was fun and you certainly have a good vocabulary! I like the idea of using a sonnet which is usually used to express adoration and love to express loathing. I'm sure you know that some of the lines don't quite rhyme etc. but I don't care. I like it!

ruminate81

09 April 2009

I liked it. You get a clear picture of the friend and what she is about. To bad the masses don't know more about her. Is this sonnet represent true feelings toward a friend? They don't sound like a friend, but more of a manipulating, if not using, and self absorbed child.

Gary Jarvis

09 April 2009

Hi Iiocus,

I really enjoyed this and its steady rhythm. Really great work. Keep it up.

Regards
Gary

Carl

10 April 2009

I really enjoyed reading your sonnet. Some of it is a bit archaic (sweet dame of pulchritude) nonetheless it's quite an achievement to write a sonnet so successfully!

Also see: laughing and joking (DramaQueen1992) • Unchained (ChrissieJo) • A very old collection of poems(not just ones created by me) and qoutations (DramaQueen1992) • Rival (TheDarkNarrator340) • a short trip (DramaQueen1992) • cumming out of the trance (fotherfcker) • Her Way (gwdare) • Quest to the Friendly of heart (TheDarkNarrator340) • Determination (TheDarkNarrator340) • Reflection (gwdare)

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