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What is my character doing?

By ruminate81 | Posted: 09 April 2009

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What is my character doing?

I'm going to describe sounds, feelings, emotions, my characters actions, but not what he sees. What is the purpose, you might be asking, and that is to see if I can create imagery without pictures. When you answer, please answer without telling me directly what he is doing. Use imagery to describe what my character is doing. Don't tell the answer directly. The words for what he is doing should never be posted. Let's begin. 

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He Leaned back and waiting patiently and a little anxiously for the beginning. The excitement was rising with each passing second. The moment of no return had already passed. He was locked in now. The moment of chickening out was over, and he would soon be experiencing sensational force of excitement. 

The clinking from below was a slow reminder to the momentum that would be produced. Each metallic clink was designed to implant yet another layer of excitement, or in some cases fear into an individual. His state was a state of pure excitement for he knew he would live. He knew it was safe, but yet some how never quite feels that way until the end.

The clinking stopped and gradually the feeling of losing his balance started to take over. Then his balance is removed completely and his equilibrium ceases to exist. The sensation is replaced with a new sensation that grew with each second. This new sensation was pushing from the front as air was forced around him and a pulling on his back preventing him from moving. The force would repeat itself in different variation pushing him around until the end.

The screams from others nearby were a mixture of joy, fear, and pure adrenaline. The screams would come and go with the increase of force. A combination of people shrieking, rushing of air, force, and roaring from below created a vortex of sensations. The combination of everything caused him to hold on for dear life.

Then at last he is pushed forward and his stolen equilibrium is returned. The sensations are over, but the joy of the experience remains for a bit longer. Laughter and excited hollering can be heard from others in the area.

He then waits patiently sitting there until it is his turn to leave.
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Comments 
Gary Jarvis
09 April 2009
An excellent portrayal of the enjoyment his task would bring and the sillyness that runs through each and everyone of us though we know it is entirely safe. Maybe you could use a line around his stomach floating within him and getting tied in knots as he is forced out of the confines of normal mortal movement.

I am not sure how to use imagery to describe what the thing is but just to let you know you can paint it without saying it and this would work great as a short story if you fleshed it out a little bit more.

Cheers
G
ruminate81
09 April 2009
Oooh. Good point. I should have said something about his tummy. That is definitely something that would be affected in this activity.
Gary Jarvis
09 April 2009
Agreed. It always makes mine lurch when you hit those dips and turns.

G

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